Thursday, 8 August 2013

Learning - A Short Story

 
At the sound of the car pulling into the drive, she ran quickly to the window, desperately trying to read his mood from her vantage point.
By the time the rickety porch door slammed shut she was already at the fridge, reaching for the ice cold beer she knew he craved.
Turning to the man she still loved, she forced her nervousness from her face, although it still showed in her wide eyes.
"All the jobs you gave me this morning are done, your dinner is in the oven and I've asked Jane to come over and collect me".
She reached for the bag she had hidden, her shoulders slumped until now, straightened as if pulled by an invisible string and she walked resolutely out to the street.


In a bid to develop my writing skills, I am taking part for the first time in Lillie McFerrin's weekly "Five Sentence Fiction" Link up. This week's prompt is "LEARNING"

Please pop over to her site to read the other great submissions

Lillie McFerrin Writes

8 comments:

  1. Welcome Carrie L!

    Certainly you have your writing skill very well developed!

    You tale is really good!

    Od Liam

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    1. Thank you Od Liam, it's still early days in my writing, but I'm really enjoying it!

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  2. So sad, but hopefully she's learned the hard way and life will be brighter now...

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    1. Hi Lisa, yes I wanted to make sure she showed her strength in the story.

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  3. That's an amazing first attempt! I really empathised with the main character; you portrayed her fear and strength very well without telling but showing. Excellent job. x


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  4. This is very good Carrie. I am amazed she has the strength to do this and he will let her. Don;t be a steanger, we love to read good writing like this.

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    1. Thanks Dobson, I'll certainly be joining in again!

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